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Message to Readers
What can I improve on, should I continue with this style of writing?
'Questions echo from the lounge'
I love this as it soft of involves a mystery!
There is lots of onomatopoeia which is perfect in this! Every sound you have thought of which is fantastically described!
Thank you for writing this piece, I thoroughly enjoyed reading and reviewing it! I hope you find my feedback useful, but do remember its only my opinion, some parts of where I believe could be improved, you may disagree with it and that’s totally fine!