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Norah

United States

A writer who wants to be an actor who wants to be a poet.
Witchcraft | Queer Musings | Moon Poetry

Message to Readers

Commas! They have always been a weakness. Tell me if there are too many or not enough. Any other advice would also be welcomed.

The Metaphor Man

May 11, 2016

PROMPT: Illumination

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He was steady as the antique clock, left to rust in an attic somewhere, steady but never on time. When he stretched his hands, back and back and back, and the dappled light soaked his face, he looked like a waterfall, his shirt riding up, his hair lose, and like a tree, simaltaniously.

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  • Gail -u-

    Mmmmmmm commassss XD
    I think this would be better if it was in a poem form. (I think) Your writing focuses on the things the characters do rather than the surroundings and time period in the story. So incorporate descriptions of the surroundings in your writing?


    about 2 years ago