Peer Review by Princess Maria (United States)

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eyes like the ocean

By: HermioneGranger67


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eyes like the ocean has you,
my lady,
eyes like the ocean.

sometimes raging, stormy blue
a windswept sea,
crashing waves and foaming devils.

Sometimes tranquil, crystal green
waves curve, o'er smooth glass rocks,
the peace in the world.

eyes like the ocean has you,
my lady.
eyes like the ocean.


Peer Review

How you capture the two moods of the lady by comparing her eyes to the ocean.


Maybe expand upon that by adding more stanzas about her different moods and comparing it to the sea.


Reviewer Comments

Very lovely to read aloud. Promising for a poet.