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all my pieces start out good, but then....
thanks, surly wombat!
I love the theme of this piece! It's very spooky and extremely Halloweeny. Also, you have great imagery throughout the piece, and you describe the witches very well.
I'd like to know more about why the witch took the toddler. What was she planning to do with it? Why was she interested in it in the first place? Also, I think you could expand more on what the witches did after they put the city to sleep. I'd love to know what they did beyond decorating the city.
Overall, this is a great piece, and I want to know what happens next. Most of my highlights are just things about punctuation, but those should be easy to fix. Other than that, make sure you're staying in the same tense throughout the piece. You start in the past tense and move to the present tense later, and this is kind of confusing to the reader. Anyway, I enjoyed reading this. Keep writing! :)