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This piece is PURELY fiction. This piece is inspired by "Macbeth" by William Shakespeare. I would recommend that you check it out.
The mystery. I was racing to read the next stanza that could've given some answers, but instead left me with more questions! I love it!
Dial back the suspense occasionally. give me something concrete to base the story around and then build suspense from fact. The 5th stanza did this well, but I'd like to see more.
I've never read Shakespeare, so I can't comment on that aspect of the piece, but the craft, imagery, mood, and organization of the poem fit the overall eerie tone well. Thanks for entering the competition and letting me read.