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I would really like if you commented and reviewed this piece. Any feedback is always appreciated! :)
I like the part about the serene sleep-how fun would that be?
Maybe the last paragraph- you could expand on why you described it using all those words
This is so dreamlike, and it reminds me of a fantasy book with fairies and mermaids! Great work!