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Message to Readers
My one of a kind piece!
I found the "I am black" patch of the quilt to be very intriguing. Black is a very mysterious color because it harbors, or maybe sucks in, the vibrancy of the other colors. You say that black demonstrates an "air of authority." What do you mean by that? Do you mean that reverence is often given to the black of darkness because it holds the unknown?
Who is this piece really about? You begin by comparing colors to attributes that you find in yourself; however, by the end of the piece, you talk about humanity as a whole. Your conclusion seems to state that each person is his/her own color. In order to align this piece to fit better, what if you only focused on one specific color whose attributes you exemplify. Then by the conclusion of this piece, you could mention how your color enhances the colorful quilt of humanity. For example, do you see that your black mysterious elegance somehow allows another person's yellow gregarious personality to shine?
I really liked how you chose colors and created characteristics for them. The one thing that I would caution you about is to be careful not to create too much colorful contrasts This can get your reader a bit lost. Besides that, thank you for having allowed me to read your piece. You seem like quite a dynamic person with such a colorful personality.