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i spent way too much time with this character ok
The amount of detail you go into about the character is amazing. It was hard to understand of course, but I think I've got a pretty good grasp on it by now. The title is still a mystery to me, though. I've memorized it and cogitated on it for a long time, but haven't gotten anywhere with it. I'd appreciate it if you reply to this review and explain it to me. :)
I left a lot of questions about the writing in the highlights, and I think that you could improve this piece by adding more to the parts where there could be confusion. This is basically a steady stream of inner thoughts, but some more detail and information about them would be helpful.
You write beautifully and your metaphors are outstanding! You asked for a critical review, and I tried my best, but I'm afraid that some of your ideas are beyond me. The average person (like me) will likely fail to fully understand and appreciate this piece, but even so, it's really good!