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i spent way too much time with this character ok
The intrigue, the depth, the figurative language. All masterfully done, at some points I was confused (hence my comments), but overall, the piece is relatable, beautiful, and something I would love to see continued.
Please, please, please, please, please, PLEASE do not get any deeper. I struggle to grasp the words that flow from your ink, for it's spilled in spirals.
Your protagonist's varying literal view provides strange bits of comedy throughout this piece that I was for which I was not prepared. Their use of metaphor adds a strange depth to the story that I didn't think I'd need.
I'm glad we got paired for reviewers' club this month, but your work seems a little to deep for my skills. I spent a lot of time researching possible allusions and metaphors and hope that I adequately reviewed your work.