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Okay, so I didn't know how to end it, but what do y'all think?
This piece was very intriguing, but fairly loosely related to the prompt. It seems that the main item which the character carries is her sadness. It reveals a lot about the context of the story, such as what she is doing wandering through the park.
Again, without much of a list, the metaphorical weight which the character is carrying reveals her fears. She obviously fears being lonely and not seeing her father as much as she used to.
I enjoyed this piece and thought that it was a very interesting idea. There are perhaps a couple of sentences that could be adjusted to make the meaning clearer (like I have highlighted), but it was mostly clear. I would also recommend having a go at following the prompt a bit more closely. Maybe this could be a free piece of writing instead? The pacing of the piece was great, and I enjoyed reading it. Great job!