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I really liked the theme of this piece. As a twin, everything you wrote felt very relatable to me, and I like your introspective style of writing. It really brings readers into the mind of the narrator.
I would have liked to know more about your sister's story and your relationship with her! I feel like these are delicate topics that could bring a lot of emotional impact to the piece. However, I understand that this is a very personal story, and you don't have to share anything you feel uncomfortable with!
First of all, this review is really late; sorry! Second of all, I highlighted some things you might want to take a look at in your piece. I apologize if I was a bit harsh with all the highlights, but since this is an essay for school I thought it would be helpful to offer as much constructive criticism as I could. I do like this piece a lot, though! I think it shows GREAT promise, and I'm sure your final draft will be amazing. Keep up the great work, and I'll be here for your next draft!