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Republishing for prompt 1 of HelpMe512's #Helpme2020 contest as well as The Great Gabs-by's contest. Go check them out!
Okay, so I definitely see the potential here for a full-on series. Your descriptions are godly, from the imagery you use to describe the world to the metaphors written to help readers better understand what's happening. Simply, outstanding work. I enjoy the mystery you have regarding the "what happen to the mother" and the 'truth' (if you will) of the "xarae". It's amazing how you immediately thrust the reader into your world and make it so they instantly understand enough of the myths/legends to get an idea, but not know too much where they get bored. What I'm saying is, you did amazing about letting the readers know what they need to know but also keeping secrets and mysteries to keep them interested.
I highlighted a few ideas where you could expand. But one main thing I noticed where some highlights tie back to is the culture. In your stories, as your world build, you also have to create a culture for the people. Here, you tactical one big part of the culture: beliefs. However, you could also add more, like their names and symbolism. (Now, you can also borrow this from other languages, it doesn't have to be 100% made up.) Another place you could dive further into, is the part where you said the xarae are keeping the mother to themselves. I think this concept, but I feel as though it needs a little more detail. Like is this normal-do they often 'take' mothers and that's why the child would quick to believe? Or was this new and something never happened before, therefore pulls into question is her mother a goddess or of some special importance?
So, I enjoyed this piece a lot and would definitely read more if you continued writing. I liked the way you talked, your diction lovely and you used 1st person perspective brilliantly. Also, this was like a childish tale with listens to learn but also a fantasy novella worth reading because it's so magical. Best wishes! And keep writing!