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Republishing for prompt 1 of HelpMe512's #Helpme2020 contest as well as The Great Gabs-by's contest. Go check them out!
Wow, this is such a beautiful piece! Even though it is so short, it is worded so elegantly, it draws the reader in and it also makes the reader feel an array of emotions- I felt happy at first, then sad. and then happy and hopeful again. This is a stunning piece.
Maybe you could elaborate more on the protagonist's bond with their mother, so that the readers can connect much more.
Overall, this was an amazing piece! And as some of the people mentioned in the comments, you should definitely turn this into a series. Great work!