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This is for DaBolo's #hybrid contest and amohn04's #tellastory contest. Go check them out!
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I like the perspective of this. Almost from a child's perspective is the vibe I got here.
ok. you have said ''whose fire had died made the fire inside her die too.' is this an indication that she died? this needs to be clearer. Just a thought.
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