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Message to Readers
This is for DaBolo's #hybrid contest and amohn04's #tellastory contest. Go check them out!
Feedback is greatly appreciated. I don't mind harsh criticism at all, so be brutally honest :)
Can I start with everything? This piece is like watching a tapestry being woven; slowly taking strands of fabric and turning them into a work of art. Your descriptions throughout the piece remind me of the old folktales that are basically forgotten, just a whisper of a time long ago.
I know I'm being really unhelpful, but I really don't see anywhere that could be improved, other than that one "but." I originally thought the beginning was a little weak, but that's only because the piece needed to build into its beauty, not jump into it.
This piece is made of gorgeous imagery and description. I love the length (perfect for just a taste of a story), and I love how it builds and concludes so peacefully.
Gosh I feel so lame for not having any critiques. I'm usually really good at finding places for improvement, but I'm at a loss here.
Great job, and I hope to see more of your work on the site.