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Message to Readers
This is for DaBolo's #hybrid contest and amohn04's #tellastory contest. Go check them out!
Feedback is greatly appreciated. I don't mind harsh criticism at all, so be brutally honest :)
I love your writing style and your emgagement of the reader through this storytelling tone. Your tone treats the reader as a general audience and therefore, you're able to explain allusions more precisely and with a mystical air. It's enigmatic and interesting. The end is also a little poignant but hopeful at the same time and can really tear the reader in both directions which is absolutely powerful. This would be the strongest point in your piece.
In my opinion, barely anything is lacking here. The imagery and diction are all intentional and sophisticated. Everything flows naturally through the piece and there are no gaps in understanding when I read it.
This piece is packed with allusions and bits of engaging storytelling which is so prominent in your writing style and makes the reader interested and invested in the story. You are able to strike such a good balance between hope and poignancy that it has the ability to pull the reader in both directions at the same time, wanting more from it. I think you have a wonderful writing style that is truly difficult to achieve! Can't wait to read more of your works!!:))
P.S. Sorry for such a late review and I hope you don't mind!