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This is another fiction I'm writing (or... have been writing), and I guess if anyone has any input that would be great! Thanks!
I liked the last line. It stood out to me because it kinda gave me some information on the character's personality even though it wasn't necessarily for that. It told me that the character was mature, well at least enough to be wary of her surroundings.
I feel curious about what was going to happen to her and what happened to Jacob. I feel the urge to read on. I like that in a story. I like how it keeps me interested and makes me want to read on.
I would ask what got the idea of this story going. What inspired you to write this wonderful piece? I ask this a lot by the way. It is something that interests me.
I also say this a lot, but, this is a good piece. Please write more! I am on a bit of a cliffhanger and I am not a big fan of those(normally). That is especially true when it is on something that I really like or even when I just want to know what was going to happen next. By the way, good job and keep up the good work!