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The imagery in this piece is deeply relatable and vivid. I love you beautiful things to negative feelings "violent flower." Everything from your world choice, use of italics, caps, and the title makes this piece immersive and powerful.
I see a connecting theme between the three parts of this piece, the 1. Anxiety, the overload, 2.Art, a balance(but still hesitation?) 3. Vastness, too little. This isn't the theme you have to center the piece around, it's just one I notice underlying. I think adding some lines that draw a clear connection between these three parts of the piece can make I feel even more powerful.
Absolutely wonderful piece. I'm glad you're revising old work! It's a great way to improve.