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The figurative language and lyricism of your poetry stupefied me. All of your lines felt fresh and unique, with not even a hint of cliched or overused phrases. Some of my absolute favorite lines include "...a violent flower that only blooms at night", "i crinkle like origami...", and "...a strawberry aftertaste in the mornings and a cyanide cherry pit at night?" Another aspect I immediately noticed was your ability to pin down rather fleeting and flimsy feelings. Especially in the third stanza, I found the questions you asked very thought-provoking and existential. They address societal and personal issues that I think many people across the world can relate to.
In your footnote, you say that these poems are individual, a "jumble of things". Even though they were written separately, I think they work very well as a little collection or as stanzas of one large poem (the middle two seem particularly compatible). My only comment is that I think the ending to the first stanza is a little lackluster. The other ones feel a lot more conclusive, but the ending of the first stanza reads more unfinished. From your footnote, I'm assuming these poems are still incomplete, so it's just something to consider for the future.
It's really hard to express just how much I enjoyed reading this collection of poems. Your writing style is absolutely beautiful, lush, unique imagery intertwined with personal experiences and intricately described emotions. I love your work and I'm so glad I stumbled across this piece to review <3