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I really like the title of your piece and how you used alliteration to tie it all together.
This might be hard to do, but I think that if you linked the idea of dreams from your first sentence to the idea of poems in your second sentence it would flow better.
This is a really good piece, and I think it explains and responds to the prompt pretty well. Keep writing! :)