Peer Review by Ellenrbnsn (United States)

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By: Robert Snider

PROMPT: Illumination

Her long black hair flowed like an obsidian river over her deliberately casual outfit. Her clothes were always ripped, a representation of her heart after fifteen long years.

Peer Review

I love your language and comparisons! They really add depth to such a short piece.

What was your inspiration for the character; is she based from a real human being?

Reviewer Comments

You really pack a lot into such a short piece! You use beautiful language and great comparisons that really create a vivid character. However, the title seems a bit unfitting. How could you modify or expand the character or the title to better fit? In the piece, though, the flow is excellent. Wonderful work! Keep writing!