reviews pLeAsE. reviews without anything constructive are honestly a waste of your time, more than anything. be harsh or whatever when you critique me, but please do.
as for comments, they help a lot lol so if you drop a few, it would be highly appreciated.
i think i understand being lonely
in a city full of ghosts
now, more than ever
the enchantment of gentle
murmurs on public transport
lovers whispering under their
breaths, metros whizzing past
a walk of shame and unmet
deadlines
being older is appallingly sad
maybe i miss how things used to be;
faux romances and the diaspora of my
feelings, encased in moments of
interlocked fingers, languid gazes
a head full of illogical dreams.
and i know how i remember it
is so much more bewitching than
how it really was; eluding memories
grinning at me naughtily as i
scramble to gather the vestiges of
sunny days
my beaming smile
my ringing laugh
my shining eyes
i lived in the past too much
follies are a second nature;
staring at the abyss
the abyss staring at me
singing to the empty blue seats
of dubai's cold, lonely metro trains
the ravine is exhausted of embracing
despairing souls, silver linings ceasing
new moons mourning
summers aching
and i—
dying
Footnotes
this, and a couple of my last pieces are literally written like an asthmatic attack, but im trying something new lmao pls bear with me till i hopefully get better
i know it's basically been a lifetime since i read this piece and had it on hold to comment, but this is??? so good???? the nostalgia factor is real here, and there's so many incredible phrases that i could never write myself, even given a hundred years to hone my craft. you are amazing.
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Caravallover02
Honestly this is amazing. Your vocabulary range is so wide, and the piece just flows like a stream, carrying the reader along with it.
agustdv
@anha thank youuuu TT I live for your comments
Anha
i know it's basically been a lifetime since i read this piece and had it on hold to comment, but this is??? so good???? the nostalgia factor is real here, and there's so many incredible phrases that i could never write myself, even given a hundred years to hone my craft. you are amazing.
Dani A. Remlap
You are my favourite writer on this site
artfullylost
This is beautiful and I really love the aesthetic of it