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Hi! I've worked REALLY hard on this story, but I published all of it in 1 entry and no one read it. I think it will be better if I do it in pieces, so this is the prologue! Your likes means more to come of this story, so remember to like!
This story has a very unique style that is interesting and engaging. The characters are well-developed and have their own voices, especially Charisse later in the story. That's really hard to do but you're very good at it.
I think that in this prologue you could set up the scene a little more by describing the setting in more detail. It would be great to have some imagery of this underwater world because there are so many opportunities for description. You have a long string of events and internal thoughts, but maybe it would be nice to step back sometimes and add some imagery and description. Anyway, I really like the way you set up this prologue!
Great job! It was fun to review this piece. I'll try to review the next part of your Churning Waters series when I dig myself out of my pile of review requests. :)