agustdv

United Arab Emirates

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far too nonchalant about things i should probably care about

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reviews pLeAsE. reviews without anything constructive are honestly a waste of your time, more than anything. be harsh or whatever when you critique me, but please do.

as for comments, they help a lot lol so if you drop a few, it would be highly appreciated.

sigaro

December 8, 2019

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you are an effigy of nonchalant affection
ripped jeans in the snug corners of a hollow december
i think you knew what i meant when i said nothing—
unsung feelings, glances laced with vitriol
you watched me sink into paperback novels
i lived in my head all the time


you did not understand me playing
tic
tac
toe

with my emotions, bleed as they might
for lyrical mastery 
and the intricacy of a sob story
but i reeked of apathy, really
fish dead eyes at screaming lovers
smug faces at tragedies
my apartment crying for me;
i think i was scary 


sigaro,
señor, won't you light it for me?
please close the door on your way
out
intruders love me more than you do.
you should dress warmer in december
and cry in the taxi home
and sleep under the neon lights
of a barman's generosity

maybe you and i are a hiccup
in this seamless anecdote of 
a perfect love

 

i think i want to mention all the references i've made bec why not lmao:

title - yaoi manga 
"my apartment crying for me"- chungking express
"cry in the taxi home"- angela's flower face (pls pls listen to it, it'll break your heart)
 

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2 Comments
  • Anha

    love love love love your work. "you are an effigy of nonchalant affection", "glances laced with vitriol" like wow!!


    12 months ago
  • BurningMidnightOil

    The diction and syntax in the piece are top-notch, as they are in all you other pieces. The imagery you have created with four short stanzas is unbelievable! Well done as always:)


    12 months ago