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Its a very comforting piece that manages to relate to your own home and excellently captures the warmth of Christmas with family.
It balances out the idea that your home is not perfect, yet it is perfect to you and that is all that really matters. It gives a 'feel-good' message without making it blatantly obvious.
I would have liked perhaps a little more detail from the memories and have them more evenly spaced out throughout the piece. I really liked the contrast between the modern version and the memories.
I thought this was a really strong piece that I think you should push to make perfect! Perhaps if you space out the paragraphs and assign them to each subject it would immerse the reader even more. For example the last paragraph could just be comparing the differences from then to now. I really enjoyed travelling to that Christmas time and feeling the warmth from the piece, can't wait to see how you can improve it even more!