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I really like the concept of the piece!
I think adding more detail would be a good idea, maybe the setting or more insight in to the animals themselves. If your goal here was to show just the sounds they make, then that was recognizable, but honestly makes the piece seem a bit childish. Adding more detail t how they sound as well as using more descriptive words could really help the piece evolve. Overall splendid idea!!
Always keep writing and aspire to be better :)