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Greetings, fellow earthlings. Any feedback is appreciated!
I admire how easily you handle your experience in writing; there is no anger or sadness visible in the work, which helps you to deliver your message on learning to let go (it shows you truly have let go of this friend). You may still be harboring anger over this, but the reader would never know, based on how you wrote this work.
I also like your choice in subject matter. This is a very relatable subject; many of us have lost friends, and others have had their places taken by another person. Jealousy is a very real and understandable emotion, and it also makes sense to be compared to a monster
This is deeply true for me. I just lost my best friend, and I could say it all began when we invited a new friend into our group. This whole piece makes sense to me and evokes emotion.
I liked the focus on several scenes (specifically the first day of fifth grade and the swings), while still compressing a long story (several years in duration) into a very short work.
I think you were trying to say that sometimes our ties with one another break, but these experiences can ultimately teach us things we never would have learned on our own, and these broken connections allow us the opportunity to forge new ones.
Personally, though, I think you need a little more on the idea of connection; to me, it was not entirely clear that this was supposed to relate to the connections between humans. Although, the "we're all human" sentence does show that we're all similar, and therefore connected in one way or another.
Keep it up! This is a really good piece; anyone who has been in the same situation as you will think the same, as it is very relatable.