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In Drift, I love the words you have chosen to use, the description is amazing which is one of the things I love about this piece. Also when she receives the email, I love the words you have chosen to describe her reaction.
Okay. I relate to this narrative so much. I met my best friend when I was 2 and a half. After we went to school, we started to not get along. Now in high school, we are at different school, but both do squad swimming. I'll email her all the time yet never hear back a reply. She just ignores it. I can relate to this narrative so much its crazy!
I loved how you described the scene of their last conversation. The detail was not over doing it but was just right. The reflection over these events that occurred was perfect! I loved how you described how you felt. You have included characters, a setting and the email she sent you. You have done such a great job, you ticked all the boxes!
Friends are just the people you grow up with. Family's forever.
You have done an amazing job so far! Keep going with this piece...its gonna turn out amazing!
Great work! This piece was one I can relate too and absolutely amazing!