Peer Review by Eden Lee (United States)

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you ask me why #sixlittlestories

By: Blotted


you ask me why i'm insane?

well, if being insane means birdwatching,

 or meditating with my eyes open,

or painting canvas with jet fuel

and seeing beauty in artificial sunset,

then yes, I am quite insane

you ask me why i'm different?

well, if being different means loving,

or saying I love you back

to someone who you've just met  

by campfire light dancing across faces

well then of course, I'm different

you ask me why i'm crying?

well if crying means letting go

or seeing a rainbow behind tears

and retreating until you find yourself

in worlds that are yours alone

well, that's probably why I'm crying

you ask me why i'm smiling

well if smiling means saying goodbye

or masked facade to hide behind

maybe the residue from a joke

or the warm embrace of care

well then that's why I'm smiling

you asked me (at my bedside, paved with emotion) why I'm dying

i took your hand in mine

and told you i was insane

i told you i was different

told you i was in love

and i told you i smiled

maybe just enough for one lifetime


Peer Review

I loved the pure rawness of this piece and how creative and emotion-filled it was.

I would add further recognition upon the whole "upon my bedside" idea, to just emphasize on it, without blatantly telling the readers what it means.

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