Peer Review by bethanyyy (United States)

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Froot Loop

By: aharry01


PROMPT: All Talk

You know....you know what's weird?
The fact that you're reading on the floor of your boyfriend's bedroom instead of sitting with him?
No. Well yeah, but no. What I was gonna say was like, in books right? 
Books, yeah.
Like, why does the character always die in the end or the beginning? Just think about it. A major character never dies right smack in the middle of the book. It's absurd, really. 
What about....what about the one where the kid like, kills himself right smack in the middle.
I mean, there's a lot of books like that....
Well, there you go. 
So you gotta kill yourself to get a decent middle spot? Otherwise you just get offed right at the beginning or the end?
Well, yeah I guess--HEY! Don't throw Froot Loops at me!
You're a Froot Loop!
Tell me something I don't know...
SOMETHIN I DON'T KNOW! SOME--
That wasn't an invitation to sing....
Everything's an invitation to sing!
That's nice, pumpkin....
You know what else is weird?
Do I really want to?
Like, why do couples call each other food names? Like how you just called me honey?
And you called me a Froot Loop?
Yeah! Like, what if like, and hear me out here, couples called each other by their favorite foods.
Mmm, because nothing screams sexy like saying "Hey you....potato."
Come here you little french toast.
Wanna make out, popcorn?
You bet, kale chip.
Mmmm........I love you, muffin.
You too, tomato soup. 


Peer Review

A couple with the girl being very curious.


I'm interested, because I never really realized that characters die at the beginning or end and I also assume that the two characters really like each other.


Reviewer Comments

Nice work, and keep on writing!