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What delighted me most about this piece is that it not only tells a story but also describes something. Many authors write stories OR write descriptions about a setting, feeling, or thing, but this author did both. The main thing that surprised me is how this author views the underworld. Instead of a burning, fiery, raging place, it's slightly more monotone and grey. This interpretation really made this piece unique.
During this piece, I did wonder whether the battles happen in the underworld or in the real world. For me, it was slightly unclear which. In addition, I noticed there was no mention of Hades or Lucifer. It would be nice to see where they fit in, like as an audience member, perhaps a judge, maybe a rewarder. Lastly, I think what happens to the losers/dead could be deepened slightly.
This piece was delightful and I love everything about it! Great writing!