BurningMidnightOil

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currently burning the midnight oil.
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For The Valiant #Ashes

August 26, 2019

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Murmured by the harps of the underworld,
Was a requièm for the souls.
For the damned
And dishonoured.
The song echoing in the vast obsidian fields.
The greying, dead grass swaying in a wind not present.
In the far distance, 
Dissonant wails harmonized with melancholic music.
Telling the tales of the forgotten.

Ghostly figures travel across
The weathered stones of the ancient steps
Each step, descending toward the ring,
Where man was pitted against man
Soul versus soul.
Heart against heart.
The ultimate battle
For a magnificent death.
And for the glory of the gods.

They fought with fervor and fire.
Their souls, so bright, so eager for triumph.
Each man scrutinized his opponent,
Looking for an opening, a flaw.
It was then, did the men clash.
They struck with enough force,
To shake the earth and sky.
The crowd roared with bloodlust and delirium.
Triumph.

The sand was stained 
with crimson blood.
Out of the dust,
Stood one victor.
His arms raised above his head
While his body gleamed with exertion. 
His opponent,
Lay on the Colosseum floor,
Eyes staring glassily at the endless blue.

The crowd thundered in approval
As the victor was granted the laural wreath.
The dead man was dragged away.
Forgotten.
Thus, the song of the dead played on.
Murmured by the harps of the Underworld,
Not only for the damned and dishonoured,
But also for the brave and valiant.
Finished: (5/05/2019 10:52PM)

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7 Comments
  • intoxicating starlight

    This piece is lovely and sparkling with imagery and spectacular word choice. "fervor and fire," "damned and dishonored," and the entire third stanza are especially exciting for me to read. I love it! Keep up your brilliant writing! <3


    5 months ago
  • BurningMidnightOil

    @Dmoral13,

    Thank you, thank you, thank you, for taking the time to review my pieces. I really appreciate it. I’m glad you like my pieces!


    5 months ago
  • Dmoral13

    Peer review done and sent! :) Two down, more to go! You write lovely pieces though, so it's hard to review and make suggestions!


    6 months ago
  • BurningMidnightOil

    @N.,
    Thank you for the lovely comment! I’m glad you liked it:)


    6 months ago
  • N.

    The imagery is fantastic! You did a great job setting the scene :)


    6 months ago
  • BurningMidnightOil

    @New York_dreamer,
    Thank you for the lovely comment:)


    6 months ago
  • New York_dreamer

    I loved the word choice you had in this piece, it was stunningly beautiful! Amazing work! :)


    6 months ago