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The first part because it's a typical stereotype of how 16 year old act. Except now I know your not like them..
It works well in the sense of various things involved in being a teenager. I'd like to know how you can go to bed at 9:30 and still be sleep deprived when you wake up after getting 9 hours of sleep which is the required amount of people your age?
It was very well spoken and had valid opinions but you contradicted yourself a lot in various areas. Be sure to make things correlate if you talk about them more than once.