Peer Review by DarkSons (United States)

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Imagine This

By: Lilly.VB


PROMPT: Imagine This

Imagine this.
A young boy born in Medan, Indonesia.
His Mother dies when he is just five years old.
His father moves him to Holland and he grows to become a engineering student at Delft University.
At just seventeen years old he is taken by the Germans to design planes for the Nazis.
During a bombing raid he escapes and gets a train back to Holland. 
His Father is told there are no survivors. 
He hides in a basement of a  church terrified to be caught again.
He meets a girl who brings him food everyday, they fall in love.
Once the war is over the boy walks back to his home town to tell his Father he's alive.
He then treks back to the girl's town and they get married, they have many children and grandchildren. 
The youngest of those grandchildren writes their story.
Imagine that.


Peer Review

at first, I enjoyed reading this short tale, but then I really was amazed and blown away by the ending...never would've imagined that !!!!! this would definitely make for a great novel......


"His father moves him to Holland and he grows to become a engineering student at Delft University."
"He hides in a basement of a church terrified to be caught again.
He meets a girl who brings him food everyday, they fall in love. "


Reviewer Comments

well written, and definitely an excellent read.....