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The title! I think it's a strong one.
I think the last sentence hits hard? As in, I honestly think it hits even harder because while the early parts of it are brutal, the last sentence just throws a wrench into the whole thing.
Mm, I don't think so.
This is a really strong draft!! Keep up the good work!
- My current theory for this is that James' abuser is actually his own self-hatred? As in, this is his subconscious saying everything he thinks about himself, then manifesting into what I think are hallucinations.