Peer Review by Sabine of the Galaxy (United States of America)()

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He’s crazy for her

By: Destbrat


PROMPT: Flash Fiction Competition 2019

The girl next door made him crazy. Despite
her not not even being aware of his existence, it was her beautiful ignorance that made him desire her even more.

Her laugh was more addictive than any drug on the market. Her cheeks rosy and warm in even the coldest of rooms. Her hair always gorgeously bouncy...even while she slept.

Her skin felt angelically smooth. She breathed softly and quietly, her lips sealed. He stood over her, brushing his hand over her unconscious body. Her scream made him absolutely euphoric.

Sitting in his cell he longed for her.

 
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Peer Review

The first lined piqued my interest. crazy. That's the word that draws me in. I sort of had this feeling that something bad was going to happen all because of crazy.

In the last line, the author suggests that he will always be crazy for her.

No.

This is a great story, I love the way ti makes me feel the way the main character feels, crazy with passion and love.

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