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I like how each situation within the story flows,I found that interesting.It compels the reader to finish.
In the last few sentences I felt that the idea was presented was quite creative and well done.
I know that within flash fiction you can't go much into to detail but I would like to know why the child fell from the mountain,just a bit odd without an explanation. Also where did you get the inspiration for this piece?
Read this aloud and over and over again to be sure you like the way everything sounds and flows within the piece.
Good luck in the competition :)