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Possible entry for flash fiction competition, please review!
The fear that I felt for the narrator means that your piece uses great imagery and allowed me to empathize well. Honestly, I crave that when I read. Great Job!
See comments. I explained that I found your last few sentences in the first paragraph unclear.
Consider italicizing the first three words and the line "They have seen too much" for dramatic effect. Great piece! I really think you should enter it to the competition.