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I'd really appreciate anything that'll help me improve my piece :)
I was immediately captivated by the imagery of the first sentence.
I naturally assume that the two characters are lovers.
Not really, no.
It's a rather emotional story, and if that's what you want to write, you did a very good job of it.
Inexplicably hearing "Die for You" by Starset in the background of this scene.