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The wording mainly. It sounds really sophisticated.
'Down, into the sky' - the way you use this statement so simply makes it intriguing.
'The last time I saw him' ... 'the ceiling fan'. I thought this sentence as maybe a tad long. Perhaps cut it at 'but now we're here'
This is so cool. The way you've written everything and the fact that you're talking about something so fantastical in such a simple way is really cool.
I really wanna read more....