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Message to Readers
Tell me how I could improve transitions and the flow of my paragraphs!
" Whoever thinks that we are too weak or shallow will be in for a real surprise when today's fifteen year old's change tomorrows world"
I honestly think that it all seems to work well. If the writer were to expand this piece I would let the writer decide it looks like she knows what she's doing.
I came into this piece looking for nothing and I am blown away. I leave this page with happiness and understanding.