Soph_thewriter

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Any suggestions for how to make this better? :)

Midnight Swim

August 13, 2019

In the blackest night, I dive into the murky waters, relishing its cool touch across my skin as I claw my way deeper into the lake, my troubles  sinking like stones. The familiar darkness surrounds me, exhilarating yet comforting. When I emerge to gasp for a breath, thoroughly satisfied, a stunning view of the sky greets me— glittering, shiny stars accompanied by a bright, plump moon, which glows warmly in the dark hour. As I float in an awed silence, something else catches my attention. A spark flairs across the great expanse above— and it’s heading straight for me. 

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  • Soph_thewriter

    Aw thanks so much! I will definitely your suggestions into consideration :)


    over 1 year ago
  • Mistress Moonbeam

    Beautiful work! The imagery was amazing. Maybe you should describe the lake a bit more if it fitted into the word count. Maybe describe the sky and the stars reflecting on its surface, or maybe telling that you saw the spark in the reflection. Overall, your piece is beautiful, and your writing is obviously of a skillful wordsmith.


    over 1 year ago