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"If she moved her head to look at her hands, which were adorned with Catherine Devon's rings, she would've seen blood."
This sentence is a text-book example on how to create tension and a feeling of mystery, as well as to awaken questions in the reader: who is Catherine? Why is the protagonist wearing her rings? Why is there blood on her hands? What happened to the protagonist?
Look at my notes in the text and decide if you want to take my advice or not!
This is a great story you've got, I really enjoyed reading it!