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The title and that first little phrase, " War had torn our world apart" got me interested.
I think this was accomplished in that seco d paragraph, " And where hatred did not plague, there was us". This "us" is never explained neither is the "you" in the last sentence - and it doesn't have to be but it gets my imagination going. I love stories that let me create and add on to.
No, I think you actually did a really good job of explaining everything that was necessary in your limited word count.
I really enjoyed this story but I think it could be improved. If you add a few personal touches, like " where the historical buildings, once sacred to us," or some such detail that connects the narrator to this crumbling world.
Well done! This was a lovely story and an absolute pleasure to read. :)