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I’m trying to learn to write poetry. Does this work? Honestly any advice or reviews is helpful. Thanks!
The twist in the middle is beautiful and it really sparks intrigue "But really, it was when they found you". Stanzas are consistent! I like how you chose certain objects or scenery in the world that are normally viewed as beautiful in most other stories/poems (skies, daisies, stars) and turned that view around to emphasize how the character feels (impassioned, sullen). I hope that makes sense
The fourth stanza sparks my interest- they seem frustrated or mad, but why?
This poem is sweet and charming. Nice job