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"God...I grew to love that boy so much more than I ever should have. " The narrator's own nostalgia evokes an identical feeling in this short sentence.
Why does the narrator have mixed emotions toward the boy and why does the scene take place in the past?
Try to use commas instead of ands. Using more than 2 ands in a sentence makes the author/ narrator seem immature. However, if that is the intended effect, then do not listen to me! :)