Peer Review by BurningMidnightOil (United Kingdom)

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May morning

By: EAurora


she is still waiting, that woman of dust,
cradled by age and silence. she knows
she should step out into her world
bursting with spring: but it is too
bright, too achingly full of colour and
the promises to herself she never kept.

no, she will wait a moment longer
to listen for the pluck of her heartstrings
and see all the things she might have
been dance across her eyelids. had she
been stronger, smarter, taller, braver, she
might have done all this

and more. and how can she let herself
forget that she didn't? now, she fears,
it is too late: her bones creak with the
weight of stories untold and she feels
her years leak on like a ship halting
into the night. she gazes absently around

at the small expanses of her world. a
dog, a faded wedding dress, a dozen
unopened letters, two chintz sofas
upholstered by unskilled hands.
she twists a ring round and round
her finger.

please, darling, close the door.
no, darling, just a moment longer.

and then, maybe,
she will step outside,
smell the flowers of May,
and finally find her way home.

Peer Review

The deep emotion embedded within this piece made me feel what this women was feeling. Stunning.

I was completely enthralled by the short. I was curious about her regrets; what were they? Even without revealing those, the piece flowed very well and kept my attention.

Reviewer Comments

I loved this piece. Very well thought through. I have a question, if you would be so inclined to answer, what was the writing process? Did you jump around or write from beginning to end? What inspired you? Thanks:) Keep up the excellent work!