Hanan Adi

Germany

Senior Peer Reviewer. Former Write the World young writer, now mentoring other WtW young writers through peer reviews!

Message to Readers

1) The modernists will be at me for this.

2) All those who consider it cheating (it probably is, too), considering the prompt, to insert single words between my sentences, will be at me for this.

3) I spent so long on this I thought I might as well publish it. Not that I think anyone could like it.

4) As always, all feedback welcome, and thank you so much for your time!

Between the Captor and His Enemy’s Daughter

August 8, 2016

PROMPT: Countdown

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“So, thou gree’st to surrender thyself as thy sister’s ransom?”
“Yes.”
“Is it not grave a sacrifice for thy family?”
“No.”
“I think yes—I’d mourn my executed daughter.”
“Maybe.”
“And thy sister shall miss thee grievously.”
“Briefly.”
“A thousand gold would settle this—”
“Unaffordable.”
“Were ye not lately wealthy?”
“Wars.”
“Aye, ’tis sad, death…”
“Yea.”
“I pity thee…”
“Don’t.”
“Thou’rt brave.”
“Nay.”
Yea.”




 
For those less familiar with archaic language:

Thou is used for when talking to a single person.
Ye is used for when talking to more than one person.
Yea is somewhat stronger than yes. You could imagine it as, "Yes, indeed."
Nay is somewhat stronger than no. You could imagine it as, "No, indeed."

Please note that these above definitions apply specifically to this context. The meanings of these words may differ slightly in different contexts. To grow truly used to them, my advice is to read a lot of old literature.

Trust me, there are no shortcuts.

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  • Hanan Adi

    Oh yes, and I will consider continuing this, if you really like, Faith.


    over 4 years ago
  • Hanan Adi

    Many thanks to S_MGK99 for your review and suggestions!

    A hundred thanks also to Faith Linn, for your encouragement and support! You have no idea how much it means to me, and I am so glad I've been able to write something that resonates with you.

    Please come again! You're always welcome.


    over 4 years ago