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How do you rhyme so perfectly. One thing about me is, I literally can't rhyme, so this is like insane to me.
I think you need to deepen this piece further, make it more fierce, possessive, as if it is MY throne. Make it seem like you are eagerly waiting for your time to take the throne and that you will never let it go, you know?
Sorry, if I was too vague, I mean I like this piece a lot, but I feel it can be deepened. Thanks for all the support, hope this helped!!