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Seems I’m feeling melancholy. Can anybody lend me a time machine?
Your imagery is packed with heavy meaning and the tone of this piece is delightfully 'melancholy' as you put it
I feel like there's another layer of meaning that the piece is missing. The words allude to such a meaning, but as with many short pieces, the meaning can be lost in abundant abstractness
Lovely work! Yohr writing always leaves me stunned for a few minutes. The way you add voice to your work is excellent, which makes the writing feel like reality for a few moments.